Now I am going to
add some sub-points.
Why I choose this topic?
Because I love cats.
(I’ve already expand this.)
What do I want to share in my final
presentation?
1. I want to share the stories that happens between me and
the cats.
In the books I read before, the authors usually
wrote about the cats’ emotion by his or her imagination to attract the readers.
I think I can do my project in that way, too.
Of course authors were all mention about their
own feelings and wrote sincerely, that’s important, too. And don’t forget the
interaction!
2. The conversations between the couple who have fed these
cats for fourteen years.
I think I’m not going to
interview them formally, just talk to them like chatting with a friend. What we
talk about is always about cats, so I think I don’t need to “interview” them. I
post some conversations between as in the posts before, I don’t know if they
are ok.
Where are the cats?
In the park near my house.
There are about six to seven cats in the park, every cats
has its own name( named by the mother of cats.)and its own personality.
How do I do this topic?
I will go see these cats in the park
everyday, and record what I see. And sometimes I will talk to the couple and
write down what we talked about. Of course I have read some books to help me
describe these cats funnier.
I think I would let some audience erase the dad memories of cats by
my speech. Every time when I go to the park, some strangers would tell me not
approach these cats because they are dirty or they have hydrophobia(狂犬病). But actually they are not that dirty(at least you won’t
get sick if you wash your hands)and they don’t have hydrophobia.(or I would
be the first person who dead in hydrophobia)
Topic: cats
Main idea: I not quite sure about the main
idea, I think what I want to express how cute these cats are, please don’t hurt
them.
Outline:
1. 強強’s story(I post it on the blogger, and Miss
You told me it will be a good beginning.)
2. Introduce these cats and shows where they like to hide in
the park. (Each of them like to hide in different places.)
3. Share the stories and the conversations.
(Introduce TNR. T=trap, N=neuter, R=return. TNR=love
street cats )
4. My conclusion(Try to be nice to them.)
Not having a main idea is a big problem. If you don't have a main idea, you can't connect the key points and examples in your essay.
回覆刪除Let's recall what you talked about earlier:
You like cats because you think you are similar to them. Can any story you have now back this up?
Because you love them and you can relate to how they feel, you'd like to tell people not to hurt them. This is also a good point, but you need a transition.