2013年11月3日 星期日

Some sub-points

Now I am going to add some sub-points.

Why I choose this topic?
Because I love cats.
(I’ve already expand this.)
What do I want to share in my final presentation?
1.      I want to share the stories that happens between me and the cats.
In the books I read before, the authors usually wrote about the cats’ emotion by his or her imagination to attract the readers. I think I can do my project in that way, too.
Of course authors were all mention about their own feelings and wrote sincerely, that’s important, too. And don’t forget the interaction!
2.      The conversations between the couple who have fed these cats for fourteen years.
I think I’m not going to interview them formally, just talk to them like chatting with a friend. What we talk about is always about cats, so I think I don’t need to “interview” them. I post some conversations between as in the posts before, I don’t know if they are ok.
Where are the cats?
In the park near my house.
There are about six to seven cats in the park, every cats has its own name( named by the mother of cats.)and its own personality.
How do I do this topic?
I will go see these cats in the park everyday, and record what I see. And sometimes I will talk to the couple and write down what we talked about. Of course I have read some books to help me describe these cats funnier.
I think I would let some audience erase the dad memories of cats by my speech. Every time when I go to the park, some strangers would tell me not approach these cats because they are dirty or they have hydrophobia(狂犬病). But actually they are not that dirty(at least you won’t get sick if you wash your hands)and they don’t have hydrophobia.(or I would be the first person who dead in hydrophobia)
Topic: cats
Main idea: I not quite sure about the main idea, I think what I want to express how cute these cats are, please don’t hurt them.
Outline:
1.      強強’s story(I post it on the blogger, and Miss You told me it will be a good beginning.)
2.      Introduce these cats and shows where they like to hide in the park. (Each of them like to hide in different places.)
3.      Share the stories and the conversations.
(Introduce TNR. T=trap, N=neuter, R=return. TNR=love street cats )
4.      My conclusion(Try to be nice to them.)

1 則留言:

  1. Not having a main idea is a big problem. If you don't have a main idea, you can't connect the key points and examples in your essay.

    Let's recall what you talked about earlier:

    You like cats because you think you are similar to them. Can any story you have now back this up?

    Because you love them and you can relate to how they feel, you'd like to tell people not to hurt them. This is also a good point, but you need a transition.

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